As I was growing up as an English teacher, I always jokingly said that if my children ever really wanted something, they could always write a persuasive essay about it and I would really consider it. Little did I know this would actually come true! I cannot express how proud I am of Annie for writing this essay! The exciting thing is, she decided to write this essay before thinking that getting a mini rex bunny was actually possible! She worked hard on this essay through school and I have the rough draft here. Keep in mind that originally this was a very private thing. And he worked on it with mrs. Falzone and didn't want me to see it at all. It was a miracle that I got to see it before her birthday, but I wanted her efforts not to be in vain! I was proud of her before I even read it. I was so happy that I cried! I even love the research that she did showing the pictures of the mini rex bunny and also the fact that it was hypoallergenic. This turned out to be true! Anyway, here is the rough draft of the essay... the pictures following are the pictures from the essay and then the final draft... SHE GOT AN A.
Cute, fluffy and loving, these animals are called rabbits. Did you know that rabbits are
the third most popular pet? That is why I think we should get a mini rex bunny. It would be a
great addition to our house because this rabbit has less dander, Leia and i would work together
to take care of it,and we could split Ollie’s cage.
The mini rex bunny would have shorter fur and has less danger so,daddy would sniff
less and you know how i hate that.Leia and i also would try to clean up the excess fur. So there
would be less fur floating around everywhere. also When we pet it, less fur would come of of it.
We don’t have to get a new cage, we could just split Ollie’s cage. Since Ollie is small
and the mini rex bunny is small it would not be squished in a little space. I don’t think ollie would
mind at all!
Leia and i would take care of it like we do the other bunnies.I know that I have not been
scooping the litter lately, but if you just remind me maybe I could get back to doing it again. We
haven’t had a bunny be in a very bad life threatening situation, well Kitty does have vestibular
disease but, that's not as much as a big deal.
Don’t you think a cute, fluffy creature would be a nice addition to our house? Wouldn’t
you like to see your children getting along for once? Besides we wouldn’t even have to get a
new cage right? So why don’t you think about getting another sweet, small mammal for our
happy, bunny loving family.
.
the third most popular pet? That is why I think we should get a mini rex bunny. It would be a
great addition to our house because this rabbit has less dander, Leia and i would work together
to take care of it,and we could split Ollie’s cage.
The mini rex bunny would have shorter fur and has less danger so,daddy would sniff
less and you know how i hate that.Leia and i also would try to clean up the excess fur. So there
would be less fur floating around everywhere. also When we pet it, less fur would come of of it.
We don’t have to get a new cage, we could just split Ollie’s cage. Since Ollie is small
and the mini rex bunny is small it would not be squished in a little space. I don’t think ollie would
mind at all!
Leia and i would take care of it like we do the other bunnies.I know that I have not been
scooping the litter lately, but if you just remind me maybe I could get back to doing it again. We
haven’t had a bunny be in a very bad life threatening situation, well Kitty does have vestibular
disease but, that's not as much as a big deal.
Don’t you think a cute, fluffy creature would be a nice addition to our house? Wouldn’t
you like to see your children getting along for once? Besides we wouldn’t even have to get a
new cage right? So why don’t you think about getting another sweet, small mammal for our
happy, bunny loving family.
.
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